The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The
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represents the average
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per cent
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of an employee's
time
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spent
on different activities from 1958 to 2008, in a particular country.
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, during the
time
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period of 1958 to 2008, most of the people spent their
time
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in day at work. The least
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spent during 1958 is
time
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to travel. In 2008, the less
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spent
is for
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going out ( with friends/family) by 6%. In 1958, sleeping was high by 32% compared to the
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of the year 2008 by 25%. By comparing
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this
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the
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sleep
was
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decreased over the period of
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which is unhealthy.
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, other interests or playing sports was the second least by comparing both the year. Fifty years later, the number of working hours spent by
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working employee is increased to 42%. And the activity of relaxing at home was
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above the percentage level in 1958.
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,
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the majority
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of the people spent their day
on
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working when comparing both the pie
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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