It is generally acknowledged that families are now not as close as they used to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together.
In recent
time
, we have seen a common trend that Fix the agreement mistake
times
families
are no more
reunited as they used to be. Many Rephrase
longer
individuals
prefer to live in a nuclear
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a nuclear family
nuclear families
families
rather than a joint
Correct the article-noun agreement
joint families
a joint family
families
. There are many reasons for living in a small
Correct the article-noun agreement
a small family
small families
families
and due to
this
many people
will not able
to maintain Add a missing verb
be able
closed
relations. In Replace the word
close
this
essay, I will address the causes for this
trend and their possible solutions to bring the
Correct article usage
apply
families
closer as
they used to be. To commence with, there are numerous Correct word choice
than
reason
that Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
families
are not staying together and relations are not valued as they were before. Firstly
, due to
contemporary
world and modern lifestyle, many Add an article
the contemporary
individuals
migrate to different cities or foreign countries for higher education or more job opportunities. Thus
, many youngsters leave their parent's home
and start a new Fix the agreement mistake
homes
life
in a different cities
. Correct the article-noun agreement
different cities
a different city
Secondly
, there are disputes among family members due to
several reasons such
as different thinking between older and younger generation
or property issues,etc. Fix the agreement mistake
generations
Therefore
, many young individuals
leave their parents
home after marriage. Change noun form
parent's
parents'
Additionally
, today's youth prefer more privacy and less inference of their parents into their life
which makes Fix the agreement mistake
lives
families
apart.
To combat this
crucial issues, parents should teach moral and family values to their children since childhood. Correct determiner usage
these
Also
, family members should learn and adjust accordingly
to individuals
preferences. Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
For example
, younger people
should respect their senior people
no matter what and older people
also
adapt new generation's lifestyle and their
ideas. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Hence
, it is important to maintain balance
between young and older Add an article
a balance
the balance
people
in families
to live happy
and healthy Add an article
a happy
life
. In conclusion, human being
are social animals, and it is necessary Fix the agreement mistake
beings
them
to live in Change preposition
for them
a
Correct the article-noun agreement
families
a family
families
. Though,
Remove the comma
apply
people
are modernize
and living nuclear Wrong verb form
modernised
life
but
in the end Correct word choice
apply
families
and relation
are everything which Replace the word
relationships
bring
happiness.Change the verb form
brings
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