The chart below shows the percentages of males and females with higher qualifications in five countries in 2001

The chart below shows the percentages of males and females with higher qualifications in five countries in 2001
The bar chart compares the shares of
men
and
women
who had university degrees in 2001 across 5 countries. (U.S., Japan,
Switzerland
,
Britain
,
Germany
)
Overall
, in
Switzerland
,
Britain
, and Japan more
males
graduated from higher education schools than
females
while
in the other 2 countries (
Germany
, and the U.S.) the percentage of
females
outnumbered that of
males
. It is
also
clear that
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similarities can be seen in
Switzerland
and
Germany
, with both of them having the largest percentage of qualified
men
and
women
respectively. The share of
men
who had higher education qualifications was the highest in
Switzerland
at 45,
while
that of
women
in the same country was slightly less at 35. The difference between the percentages of
males
and
females
was 5 in both
Britain
and
in
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Japan, with the latter being 5% less. 35% of the
males
graduated from universities in
Britain
while
the percentage of Japanese
men
was 30%
while
only a quarter of
females
which is the lowest figure in the graph went to universities. In
Germany
and in the United States,
on the other hand
, more
women
had higher education degrees than
men
. 45% of
females
who completed the survey in
Germany
said that they had the qualification, which was the highest share for
women
among all other countries,
while
10%
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men
reported so in the same country. The disparity between
males
and
females
was only slight at 40 and 35 respectively.
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