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The graph shows the regional domestic recycling rate in uk, france and germany from 2005 to 2015

The graph shows the regional domestic recycling rate in uk, france and germany from 2005 to 2015
The
lnine
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line
 graph illustrates the regional domestic recycling percentage in
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UK
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the UK
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,
France
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, and
Germany
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 from 2005 to 2015. The recycling rates of the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 showed a steady but
significantly
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 rise over the
period
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,
while
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 the percentage of recycled waste in
France
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 experienced a downward trend. In 2005, the
reclycing
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recycling
 rates of the
UK
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 and
Germany
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 were nearly 35% and 20% respectively.
Germany
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's
rate
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 increased sharply throughout the
period
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, exceeding
France
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's
rate
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in
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 the end of the
period
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. In the meantime, the proportion of recycled waste in the
UK
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 grew to 40% in 2007
,
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 and
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 remained steady until 2009. During 2009-2011, it experienced a rapid surge to more.
then
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 50% and continued with a gradual increase to 60% in 2015. In early 2005, the recycling
rate
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 of
France
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 (50%) was the highest among these three countries.
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, it dramatically declined to 30% in 2013.
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 there was a growth of 10% in 2015,
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,
France
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's recycling
rate
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 was the lowest
in
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 the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, germany, period, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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