The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates

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to us

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the amount of money which have earned from exporting different types of

thing

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things

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. In fact, we can see a comparison in export earnings between 2015 and 2016.

Also

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, there is a table

shows

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us how the value of commodities

were

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changed between 2015 and 2016.

Accroding

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According

to the bar chart,

due to

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the amount of

exporting

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exported

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petroleum products,

this

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country had a big source of petroleum.

Also

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this

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country

had

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had a positive

improve

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in engineered

good

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goods

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, they increased the

amoun

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amount

of export in

engineedred

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engineered

goods to 60

billions

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dollar.

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, they were not good enough in jewellery export. They face with decreasing amount of that

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from

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billions dollar

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billion dollars

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to 40

billions dollar

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billion dollars

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, the table shows us the most increasing values belong to

the

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textiles and in the second place,

is put

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engineered goods.

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, we can see all of the products are increased except

jems

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gems

nad

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and

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jewellery. In general,

this

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country is related to

the

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apply

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petroleum products and if something happened

for

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this

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facilities, they would be faced with a huge problem in their exporting.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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7
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

188 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

export value
economic sector
percentage change
increment
decrement
fluctuation
trend analysis
year-on-year comparison
significant growth/decline
stagnation
market dynamics
fiscal repercussions
trade balance
competitive advantage

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