The table below shows the age profile of tourists on backpacking holidays and guided tours in New Zealand in 2005, and standing next to a pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay.

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The table below shows the

age

profile of tourists on backpacking holidays and guided

tours

in New Zealand in 2005, and standing next to a pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay. As is presented in the table, the

age

profile of people, backpacking, and guided

tours

percentages

are

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on the different types of holiday

varies

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considerably. The vast majority (62%) of people from 18-30 mostly prefer backpacking. Apart

just

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over an insignificant minority (7%) choose guided

tours

Nonetheless

, the number of people

increase

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, when the

age

profile

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till

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41-50, too. It is clear from that, proportion

make

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up 57% of those who

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are on

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guided

tours

, withal, backpacking plunge to exactly a half. The 31-40

age

group is almost the same (23% and 22%)

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the

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both types.

Overall

, a large proportion (83%) was satisfied, 10% not

enjoyed

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their holiday,

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and 7

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not

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sure about

this

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The table below shows the age profile of tourists on backpacking holidays and guided tours in New Zealand in 2005, and standing next to a pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay.

The rise of social media has affected personal relationships and society as a whole.Do the advantages of using social media for communication outweigh the disadvantages?

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