The table below shows the age profile of tourists on backpacking holidays and guided tours in New Zealand in 2005, and standing next to a pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay.

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The table below shows the

age

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profile of tourists on backpacking holidays and guided

tours

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in New Zealand in 2005, and standing next to a pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay. As is presented in the table, the

age

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profile of people, backpacking, and guided

tours

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percentages

are

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on the different types of holiday

varies

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considerably. The vast majority (62%) of people from 18-30 mostly prefer backpacking. Apart

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over an insignificant minority (7%) choose guided

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, the number of people

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, when the

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profile

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till

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41-50, too. It is clear from that, proportion

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up 57% of those who

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are on

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guided

tours

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, withal, backpacking plunge to exactly a half. The 31-40

age

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group is almost the same (23% and 22%)

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the

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both types.

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, a large proportion (83%) was satisfied, 10% not

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their holiday,

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and 7

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not

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sure about

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

149 words

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The table below shows the age profile of tourists on backpacking holidays and guided tours in New Zealand in 2005, and standing next to a pie chart gives the satisfaction rating of their stay.

In many countries today crime novels and TV crime dramas are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV shows are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

Some people believe that women should be treated as equal to men when applying for a job with the police or the military. Others think women are less suitable for this kind of job. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?