A high salary is much more important than job satisfaction. What is your opinion on this statement?

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have been wider for a long time and
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of choosing
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say the amount of
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. But some
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say that how much
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satisfaction
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is more important than
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. Like the other social issues,
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economic
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for themselves. The more
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they can earn, the more stable economic
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they can be in.
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do not need to worry about the use of
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quality
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can live in
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house
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with good
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infrastructure
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.
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,
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invest their
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for themselves like
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or travel. They can spend the
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to release their stress and be relaxed like
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what they want or
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some
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for their hobby.
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feel
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satisfaction
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, it can bring some positive effects to that
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the
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and it leads to good quality of
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then
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of the good
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steadily. If
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have had a lot of changed and
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have many
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about choosing a
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nowadays.
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job
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can
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to good economic
status
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and many
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to use
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to they want.
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,
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satisfication
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satisfaction
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of the
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of
improve
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slef-esteem
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self-esteem
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company
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. I believe that it could be chosen by a personal priority not by only
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statndard
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standard
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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