Nowadays, some employers thought formal academic qualification are more important than life experience and personal qualities when they look for new employees. To what extent do you agree or disagre

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days, hiring employees for the department
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become a different trend in the market, some hiring managers judge individuals on the basis of their education, whilst, others believe that
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experience is important. I agree with the latter sentiment to an extreme extent.
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To begin
with, in today's society, people believe that ' education is the only key to success',
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to generations everyone is
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only goal is to admit
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in very
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reputated
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reputed
school.
Although
, in recent times, there were some companies, who hired people on the ground basis of their academic credentials.
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,
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main focus is to get high scores rather than understanding the assignment.
On the other hand
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic qualifications
  • life experience
  • personal qualities
  • employers
  • candidates
  • standardized prerequisites
  • theoretical knowledge
  • foundational understanding
  • technical roles
  • practical skills
  • problem-solving abilities
  • maturity
  • teamwork
  • communication
  • adaptability
  • workplace harmony
  • performance
  • creative arts
  • entrepreneurship
  • innovation
  • practical implementation
  • professional accreditation
  • industry standards
  • well-rounded workforce
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