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A local company is looking for people to do part-time work. You would like to work at the company in summer. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter: •explain why you want to work there. • say why you think you would be suitable for this work. • give details of when you would be free to work. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

#company #people #work #summer #manager #•explain #addresses #sir #madam
Dear Sir or Madam, I write with reference to the job advertisement for the Sales Representative position posted on
the
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LinkedIn. The main reason
which
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wants
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me
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to
work
 for
the
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Tech Consultancy is
,
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great
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work
 culture. I have come across some good
feedbacks
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 from your former employees in terms of the positive
work
 environment at your company.
In addition
, the mentioned
work
 responsibilities
,
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 suits my interest and allow me to upgrade my negotiation and communication skills. I believe, my past practical experience and required skillsets will make me
best
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the best
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fitting
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candidate for your organization.
Furthermore
, I have
proven
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 track record of the most number of successful closed sales at my former employer.
In addition
, I have positive recommendation
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 from my colleagues at
previous
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 workplace. In terms of
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availability, I have
much
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flexible
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 schedule during the summer break at my university. During
this
 time, I would be enrolled in part-time study on the weekend, allowing me to
work
 full days on the weekdays. Thanks for taking
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 to read
this
 letter and I would be grateful to have an opportunity to
work
 at your company. Yours faithfully, Kunj Soni
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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