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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart represents the number of
houseolds
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households
 owned and rented
accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
 in
UK
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the UK
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 and Wales between the period of 1918 and 2011 in
per-centage
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percentage
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. In 1918, the rented
households
 was raised above 70
then
 it leveled up during the following year 1939 to 1953. From 1971 to 2001, it dramatically decreased to 30%. In 2011, there
were
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slight
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a slight
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 increase in
the
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apply
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rented
households
. From 1918 to 1971, the amount of
per-centage
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percentage
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 gradually increased for the people living in the owned
households
 from 20 to 50%. During the
year
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years
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 1981 to
2011
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2011,
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 the
per-centage
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percentage
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 was dramatically high to 60 to 70%.
Overall
, there was an increased and decreased level of
per-centage
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percentage
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 of owned
households
 and rented accomodations through the years from 1918 to 2011. Both of them
owns
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owned
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 the same
per-centage
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percentage
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 in the year 1971
by
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50%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words per-centage, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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