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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Writing 31 Family type Proportion of people from each household type living in poverty single aged person 6% (54,000) aged couple 4% (48,000) single, no children 19% (359,000) couple, no children 7% (211,000) sole parent 21% (232,000) couple with children 12% (933,000) all households 11% (1,837,000)

The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Writing 31 Family type Proportion of people from each household type living in poverty single aged person 6% (54,000) aged couple 4% (48,000) single, no children 19% (359,000) couple, no children 7% (211,000) sole parent 21% (232,000) couple with children 12% (933,000) all households 11% (1,837,000)
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Given table shows the information
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of
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 family types in
Austrailia
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Australia
 in 1999, and
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proportion
given
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 as a percentage.
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description
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the above
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above given
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 chart.
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parent family was
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 common(21 %) type and unmarried
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 slightly less (19%) than sole parents.
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 usual families,
couples
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and couples
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children
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 type in that year and as a percentage that
propotion
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proportion
 was 12%. Group of members who live as
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one family had taken only 11% in 1999. There wasn't
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 gap between married
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 who had no children and single
aged
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people
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 and as amount 359000 and 54000 were the amount respectively. Aged
people
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 who live as couples were only 48000 and 4% was the percentage.
According to
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 the given chart in
Austrilia
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Australia
 sole
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parent
 was very popular and aged couples were the less family type in 1999.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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