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the charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. the same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information and compare where relevant.

the charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. the same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010. Summarise the information and compare where relevant.
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The following pie charts compare how one
hadred
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hundred
people
 who visited the
Hotel
 Parkway voted about their
satisfuction
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satisfaction
 that was provided by the
hotel
 between the years 2005 and 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the majority of the visitors remained mostly content with the customer service during 2010, with the highest proportion of them being excellent,
whereas
 during 2005 almost half of the population who were asked,
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seemed
satisfacted
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satisfaction
. Twice as many
as
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people
 voted for an
exquisious
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exquisite
 guest's satisfaction at about 40%
during
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 2010,
whereas
 only 14% of individuals voted in 2005. As for persons who found the
hotel
 good in customer
servise
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service
 had doubled from 14% to 28%. The proportion of
people
however
 who believed that the
hotel
 services were
exqicit
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exquisite
,
it
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had dropped significantly to more than half of the percentages of
the
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2005 (from 45%
2005
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 to 17%
during
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in
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 2010.
SImilarly
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 to
this
 drop,
poor
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guests
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 service rate had a substantial fall to 12%.
While
people
 who experienced a very low service dipped
shaply
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sharply
 to almost 4 times, as during 2005 the proportion had been 15% and during 2010 was 4%
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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