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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in varlous categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in varlous categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
bart
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bar
 chart illustrates the money that one country's
export
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had earn
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earned
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 in 5 different categories in 2015 and 2016, and the table shows the ratio change in all
categaries
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categories
 from 2015 to 2016.
Overall
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, petroleum products and engineered
good
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goods
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 had the biggest
earning
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earnings
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 and the figure
also
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 rose from 2015 to 2016,
however
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, textiles had the least
export
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value
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 among all, but the number of
earning
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earnings
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 increased the most. To start with, the highest
earing
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earning
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 was petroleum products,
earned
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which earned
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 about 60
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015, and
grow
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grew
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 3% in
next
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the next
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 year,
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then
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apply
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followed by engineered goods,
earned
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which earned
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 around 58
billion
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dollars
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, and increased
8.5
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by 8.5
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% in 2016.
Then
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 the
nuber
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number
 of
earning
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earnings
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 dropped significantly when it
comes
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came
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 to gems and jewellery, it only had
the
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a
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value
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 of
approximily
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approximately
 42
billion
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dollars
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, and it was
also
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 the only
export
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 earning that decreased in 2016, it went
downed
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down
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 by 5.18%. And
aricultural
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agricultural
 products'
export
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value
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 in 2015 was about 31
billion
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dollars
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, and only
grow
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grew
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 0.81% in 2016.
Lastly
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, textiles had the
least
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lowest
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export
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value
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 among all, only
earned
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earning
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 about 17
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015, but the figure
grow
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grew
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 15.24%, which rose the most in 2016.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, value, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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