The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in varlous categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given

bart

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bar

chart illustrates the money that one country's

export

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had earn

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in 5 different categories in 2015 and 2016, and the table shows the ratio change in all

categaries

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categories

from 2015 to 2016.

Overall

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, petroleum products and engineered

good

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goods

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had the biggest

earning

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earnings

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and the figure

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rose from 2015 to 2016,

however

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, textiles had the least

export

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value

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among all, but the number of

earning

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earnings

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increased the most. To start with, the highest

earing

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earning

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was petroleum products,

earned

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which earned

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about 60

billion

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dollars

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in 2015, and

grow

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3% in

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the next

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year,

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then

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followed by engineered goods,

earned

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which earned

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around 58

billion

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dollars

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, and increased

8.5

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by 8.5

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% in 2016.

Then

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the

nuber

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number

earning

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earnings

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dropped significantly when it

comes

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came

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to gems and jewellery, it only had

the

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value

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approximily

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approximately

billion

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dollars

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, and it was

also

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the only

export

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earning that decreased in 2016, it went

downed

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by 5.18%. And

aricultural

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agricultural

products'

export

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value

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in 2015 was about 31

billion

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dollars

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, and only

grow

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grew

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0.81% in 2016.

Lastly

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, textiles had the

least

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lowest

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export

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value

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among all, only

earned

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earning

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about 17

billion

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dollars

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in 2015, but the figure

grow

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grew

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15.24%, which rose the most in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, value, billion, dollars with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

195 words

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