The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in varlous categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given
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chart illustrates the money that one country's Correct your spelling
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export
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had earn
in 5 different categories in 2015 and 2016, and the table shows the ratio change in all Wrong verb form
earned
categaries
from 2015 to 2016. Correct your spelling
categories
Overall
, petroleum products and engineered Linking Words
good
had the biggest Fix the agreement mistake
goods
earning
and the figure Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
also
rose from 2015 to 2016, Linking Words
however
, textiles had the least Linking Words
export
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value
among all, but the number of Use synonyms
earning
increased the most.
To start with, the highest Correct your spelling
earnings
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was petroleum products, Correct your spelling
earning
earned
about 60 Correct pronoun usage
which earned
billion
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dollars
in 2015, and Use synonyms
grow
3% in Wrong verb form
grew
next
year, Correct article usage
the next
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then
followed by engineered goods, Rephrase
apply
earned
around 58 Correct pronoun usage
which earned
billion
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dollars
, and increased Use synonyms
8.5
% in 2016. Change preposition
by 8.5
Then
the Linking Words
nuber
of Correct your spelling
number
earning
dropped significantly when it Fix the agreement mistake
earnings
comes
to gems and jewellery, it only had Wrong verb form
came
the
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a
value
of Use synonyms
approximily
42 Correct your spelling
approximately
billion
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dollars
, and it was Use synonyms
also
the only Linking Words
export
earning that decreased in 2016, it went Use synonyms
downed
by 5.18%. And Replace the word
down
aricultural
products' Correct your spelling
agricultural
export
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value
in 2015 was about 31 Use synonyms
billion
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dollars
, and only Use synonyms
grow
0.81% in 2016. Wrong verb form
grew
Lastly
, textiles had the Linking Words
least
Correct word choice
lowest
export
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value
among all, only Use synonyms
earned
about 17 Wrong verb form
earning
billion
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dollars
in 2015, but the figure Use synonyms
grow
15.24%, which rose the most in 2016.Wrong verb form
grew
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