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Paying all workers the same salary in a company promotes harmony and repect among colleagues To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#workers #salary #company #harmony #repect #colleagues
Labor is
alway
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always
 an important factor
of
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for
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 companies.
Accordingly
,
working
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environment
also
 plays an important role when running a business. Paying a suitable
salary
 can contribute to a good
environment
. Almost
employees
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all employees
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 are interested in their
salary
in
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at
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the
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apply
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first when considering
to join
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joining
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 a
work
.
Therefore
, if there are
raising
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any unwellfair
on
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in
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 their
salary
,
which
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it
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 can lead to a negative
environment
.
For example
, a
person
 who
tried
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tries
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 to
work
 hard, even overworking hours has the same
salary
with
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as
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 a
person
 who does not actually focus on the
work
, which can generate
a
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doubt regarding the ability of
productive
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a productive
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person's
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people
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 themselves and they may not
received
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receive
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 the
respection
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respect
respective
 from other partners.
Furthermore
, each
person
 has their own ability, and it is very different from individuals. The harmony
firstly
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apply
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should be generated
from
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by
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labors
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labourers
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 themselves,
then
 they contribute
it
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apply
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to the working
environment
. In conclusion, when
labors
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labourers
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 are
satified
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satisfied
in
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with
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 their
work
 with suitable factors
lead
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leads
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 to increasing harmony and
respecting
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respect
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 among colleagues. Paying all workers the same
salary
 tend to
grow
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raise
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 some issue and
that
is not facilitate
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does not facilitate
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 the working
environment
.
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