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The chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK, and Japan in the year 2009

The chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA, Canada, the UK, and Japan in the year 2009
Contained in the charts is data pertaining to the percentage of expenses
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 various categories in four countries during 2000.
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, it can be seen that spending on housing was always higher than the others, with the exception of
Japan
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 which spent most on food.
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, housing in the USA had the greatest spending in four communities,
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 the opposite was true for healthcare in the UK. About the three areas that took the majority of investment. Looking at housing, the USA comprised 27%,
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 the three other nations stood at around 23%. The statistics were similar in reference to food with all society ranging from 13% to 23%. As for transportation,
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 accounted for 19% double
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 at 10%, making it dominate
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 area. Turning to the two remaining groups which had the lesser number. Regarding healthcare, all four states made up approximately 3%, with
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 spending exactly as much as
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. With respect to clothing, expenditures were minor with the highest in
Canada
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 hitting around 6%. The chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the USA,
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, the UK, and
Japan
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 in the year 2009

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