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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages
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The pie chart illustrates the number of students able to speak other languages
in addition
 to
english
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English
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 at a UK university , observations are recorded over the course of ten years. In general, there has been an increase of
spanish
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Spanish
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 learners from 30 to 35 from 2000 to 2010, the chart
also
 suggests a decline
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the
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of 10 % in only
english
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 speaker population. The
french
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French
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 learner population has a decline of 5% ,
whereas
, the amount of
german
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German
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 learners
remain
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 constant at 10% over the years. There is an increase of 5% of people opting for another language , similar to
this
 ,the number of bilingual speakers
also
 rises by 5%. In the year 2010, there
are
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same
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the same
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 amount of pupils who speak
french
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French
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,
german
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German
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 and only
english
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.
whereas
 in 2000, the number of learners remain
the
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apply
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constant between
german
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German
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 speakers and people who are bilingual in nature.
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