Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better

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Dear Sir, I am writing to aware you about my birthday party which I have celebrated in your restaurant, and it was a great hit.
Firstly
i
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want to
thankyou
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for reserving
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floor for me on
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short notice, and for a complementary birthday decoration really it meant a lot to me,
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I have booked a buffet of 12 dishes which include four starter dishes six main
coarse
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and two desserts. I must say
food
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was tempting and
presentation
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of
food
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as
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really up to the mark, me and my friends really enjoyed the food
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the fried chicken
it's
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taste was way better than
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in the other restaurants.
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, there are
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things I want to mention which
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felt
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to share with you to improve your service.
Firstly
your waiters should be in uniform or should have a uniform
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dress so it will be easy to identify the waiter in the rush, as waiters
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wearing
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color
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dress so I find it difficult to call waiters for my service,
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is your drinks you do not have any variety of fruit juices, everyone
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not prefer soda or carbonated drinks to
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suggest you
to
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add fresh fruit juices in your drinks menu,
lastly
parking was an issue yesterday you have
a very limited lanes
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for parking it is requested to extend it so that costumers do not need to park their cars three metres away from the hotel. I
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you will take my suggestions positively yours faithfully, John Smith
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task response
Make sure to include all the required elements of the task in your letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas and paragraphs in a logical and coherent manner.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and precise words.
grammatical range
Work on your grammatical accuracy and use a wider range of sentence structures.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exceptional service
  • culinary delights
  • intriguing ambiance
  • meticulous attention
  • flavorful concoctions
  • impeccable presentation
  • charming decor
  • ambient music
  • constructive feedback
  • vegetarian options
  • seating arrangement
  • heartfelt appreciation
  • wholeheartedly recommend
  • return visit
  • enhance the experience
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