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The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.

The diagram below represents the “Comparison of how urban Chinese spent across major categories in 1995 versus the spending habits in 2011”. Summarise the information given in the diagrams. Write at least 150 words.
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The pie chart shows the differences between how the Chinese people who lived in the cities did their expenditure on important lists in their day-to-day life in the
year
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 1995 and
in
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2011.
Overall
, we can see that the majority of the expenses
is
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 on food and
the
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less money is
spend
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 on medicine and miscellaneous things.
To begin
 with, in 1995 most of the expenses
were spend
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 on refreshments and
a
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 least proportion of money
were
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spend
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 on medicine and
others
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 things.
On the other hand
, in 2011, 14% were less
spend
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 on food and 4% more was
spend
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 on medicine.
To conclude
 most
of
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the
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people like to spend more money on restaurants and healthy eating habits than any other daily habits
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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