The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages

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the percentage

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of students from

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at one university who are capable of speaking other

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divided

into 6 groups, research conducted from 2000 to 2010.

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Spanish and other

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, the least popular were two other

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and German only. In 2000, Spanish had less than a third of British Students who were able to speak.

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, people who did not know any other language had 20%.

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groups

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. Another language

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5% less than people who knew only English. Regarding to 2010 pie chart, Spanish and

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other languages

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number of students

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increased by 5%.

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four groups had equal one in ten

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per cent of students

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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages

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