The line graph gives information about percentage changes in total crime arrests for persons under 18 by locality, 1995-1998. Summarise the information and make comparison where relevant.

The line graph gives information about percentage changes in total crime arrests for persons under 18 by locality, 1995-1998.

Summarise the information and make comparison where relevant.
The percentile of majority
crime
arrest
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arrests
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by
the
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apply
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individuals under the age of 18 by locality from the
year
of
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1995 to 1998 is depicted by the line graph After analyzing the chart, It is evidently seen that there
had
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been
major
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a major
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fluctuation, at the start of the
year
there was a negligible difference, after
that
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there
had been
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a sudden upward jump in the
crime
rate
of
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in
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suburban
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the suburban
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area
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which is close to 8%
while
the
crime
figure
show
similor
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from the rural and urban area which is around 3% and 2% in the
year
of 1996.
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from 1996 to
1997
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1997,
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the offence ratio
of
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suburban places saw a sudden drop and moved to
negative
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a negative
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figure obtaining
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around
arround
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around
-2% of illegal
act
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however
in
latter
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year
this
crime
rate figure rose
upto
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up to
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2% which is
huge
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number among
three
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the three
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of them moving ahead, in the
year
of
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1995 to 1996 rural and urban streets had a
similor
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similar
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pattern and did not
show
any difference having a percentile of almost 2% and 4%
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, in contrast,
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in contrast
rural
crime
rates area
show
downward
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a downward
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direction and reached
to
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nearly 2% whilst urban
show
negative
trend
hit to
nealy
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nearly
-2% in the
yearof
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year of
year
1997. In the
last
year
, both the areas
show
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a huge negative decline
trend
and
obtain
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obtained
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the value of -35 and -4% given period of time
Overall
, It is vividly clear that all
pattern
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patterns
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show
major fluctuation,
however
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however,
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suburban
crime
rate
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rates
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show
upward
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an upward
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trend
in contrast
to
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rural
rual
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rural
and urban areas of
crime
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, year, show, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.

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