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The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003

The line chart below shows the percentage of of people in different age groups who played video games more than ten hours a week between 1984 and 2003
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This
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 chart illustrates the number in per cent of people who play video games based on the ages from 2010 to 2015. It is divided into 5 groups,
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 groups between 16 to 24, 25 to 44, 45 to 54, 55 to 64, and above 75.
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, it is shown that the highest number of video games player comes from the life
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 between 16 to 24, except in 2010 where the highest came from the life
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 between 45 - 54 Based on each
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, the graph shows the growth of each
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, where the life
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 above 75 is always placed in the fifth
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. The fourth
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 is always placed by the
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group
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 between 55 to 64 where the percentage is steady in the range of 21 to 30, and the third
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 is placed by the
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 between 25 to 44 with values between 30 to 45
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 the highest value being in 2015. The second
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 mostly placed by the
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group
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 of 45 to 55, but in 2010,
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group
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 was placed in the first
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 with a value is 52% .
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, the first
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 is placed by the
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group
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 between 16 to 24, which the growth of the percentages is shown to increase every year.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, class, group, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • percentage
  • age group
  • consistent
  • significant
  • decline
  • increase
  • peak
  • plateau
  • demographic
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • proportion
  • level off
  • escalate
  • diminish
  • interval
  • duration
  • prevalence
  • participation
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