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The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men amd women who held them in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram portrays the different levels of after-school requirements (Skilled Vocational
Diploma
, Undergraduate
Diploma
, Bachelor's Degree, Postgraduate
Diploma
, and Masters Degree) in Australia and the proportion of men and
women
 who held them in 1999. In general, the highest
male
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males
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 attended
after-school
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after school
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 was
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a Skilled
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Skilled
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a Skilled
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 Vocational
Diploma
 and the
women
 was
Undergraduated
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Undergraduate
Diploma
. The Lowest male attended post-school was
Undergraduated
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Undergraduate
Diploma
 and the
women
was
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were
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 Skilled Vocational
Diploma
. The highest proportion of
male
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males
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attended
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who attended
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 after-school was Skilled Vocational
Diploma
 with 90% followed by Postgraduate
Diploma
 with 70%. The top proportion for
female
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females
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 was Undergraduate
Diploma
 with 70%
and
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apply
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followed by Bachelor's degree with 50%. The
least
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lowest
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 ratio of male
student
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students
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attended
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who attended
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 post-school was reverse versa with the
women
, there was
undergraduate
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an undergraduate
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diploma
. The lowest ratio of female
student
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students
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attend
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attending
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 post-school was Skilled Vocational
Diploma
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words diploma, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • levels
  • post-school qualifications
  • proportion
  • men
  • women
  • held
  • clear gender disparity
  • Certificate I
  • Certificate II
  • Certificate III
  • Certificate IV
  • Diploma or Higher
  • highest proportion
  • decreases
  • overall
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