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chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

chart below shows the total numbers of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories from 1995 to 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graphics illustrate the data about the duration of telephone calls in the
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, between three different lines
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 as mobiles, local and domestic- fixed
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 from 1995 to 2002.
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, the local fixed
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 was the most common one used at that time. The number of minutes for National and international- fixed
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 and mobiles increased, but the local- fixed
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 peaked
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and dropped.
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, from the year 1995, the local usage peaked up to 90 minutes (billions) by 1999 and
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 slowly declined to 70 by the end of 2002.
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, looking at the National and international- fixed
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 which gradually increased from the duration of 35 to 60 minutes by
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, mobiles( all calls) showed a drastic change from almost zero to 45 billion by 2002.
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