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The figures give information about economic growth and household expenditure across a range of categories. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the growth of the
economy
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, and the pie charts show the division of household spending from 1995 to 2010.
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,
it is clear that
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 the
economy
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 fluctuated over the period, and the most amount
spent
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was spent
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 on housing,
food
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, and other categories
while
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 the least amount on clothing,
entertainment
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, and
travel
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. From 1995 to 2005, the growth in the
economy
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 increased slightly by around 1
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percent
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per cent
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. Roughly one-third amount was spent on housing,
food
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, and others;
however
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, less than 10
percent
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 was contributed by clothing,
entertainment
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, and
travel
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. From 2000 to 2005, the
economy
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 rose to about 5
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percent
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per cent
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;
however
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, the expense
on
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of
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 housing rose slightly, and that part contributed by
food
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.
Moreover
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, clothing,
entertainment
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, and
travel
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 experienced a slight rise, and there is no
such
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 difference witnessed in other categories. From 2005 to 2010, the
economy
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 dipped down and rose steeply; it reached again at 0
percent
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 approximately as same as
1995
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in 1995
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.
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 expenditure on
food
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 and housing
relatively
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was relatively
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 similar to each other, clothing,
entertainment
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, and
travel
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 seemed like 1995, and expenses on other categories were more or less similar.
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