The line graph grap illustrates the changes in employment trends over a period of 70 years in the United States

The line graph grap illustrates the changes in employment trends over a period of 70 years in the United States
The line graph shows
from
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how from
show examples
1970 to 2025 how employment trend
to change
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changed
show examples
, by three types of main
job
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jobs
show examples
: manufacturing, services and agriculture. The data is given by percentage. In
general
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general,
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it shows that manufacturing and agriculture
has
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have
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a huge
declided
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decline
declined
decided
,
while
services
has
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have
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a great increase. The first thing
that is
possible to observe
that
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is that
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services
has
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have
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a big peak, a little bit over
than
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apply
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70% has been up since 1975.
On the other hand
, the category manufacturing had a deep decrease after 1980, it was getting high with 40%
however
the number
descend
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descended
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to less than 20% in 3 years approximately.
However
, agriculture had
a
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the
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biggest decrease of all. It
descend
Wrong verb form
descended
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rapidament
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rapidly
over these years, it was
70
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a 70
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%
of
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apply
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decrease in 70 years,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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means almost 10% for each decade.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • employment trends
  • period of 70 years
  • United States
  • changes
  • trends
  • overview
  • patterns
  • initial changes
  • significant shifts
  • impact
  • economic factors
  • findings
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