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The line graph Illustrates the number of students from India, Vietnam, Nepal, Indonesia and Colombia, who enrolled at De Salle University during a period from 1980 to 2020. Overall, the number of the students increased significantly all countries. However, from 2010 the change for Vietnam and Nepal were much more severe.

The line graph Illustrates the number of students from India, Vietnam, Nepal, Indonesia and Colombia, who enrolled at De Salle University during a period from 1980 to 2020. Overall, the number of the students increased significantly all countries. However, from 2010 the change for Vietnam and Nepal were much more severe.
The line graph Illustrates the
number
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 of
students
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 from India,
Vietnam
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, Nepal, Indonesia and Colombia, who enrolled at De Salle University during
a
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the
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 period from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
the
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apply
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students
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 increased significantly
all
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in all
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 countries.
However
Linking Words
, from 2010 the
change
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changes
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 for
Vietnam
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 and Nepal were much more severe. The line graph Illustrates the
number
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 of
students
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 from India,
Vietnam
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, Nepal, Indonesia and Colombia, who enrolled at De Salle University during
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
 period from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
students
Use synonyms
 increased significantly
all
Change preposition
in all
show examples
 countries.
However
Linking Words
, from 2010 the
change
Fix the agreement mistake
changes
show examples
 for
Vietnam
Use synonyms
 and Nepal were much more severe.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, vietnam with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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