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The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.

The line graph below shows the changes in the rate of sales of Gold in Dubai in one year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparison where relevant.
The provided line graph represents how the market of selling gold
of
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 Dubai was in the whole year of 2002. The
overall
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 trend shows
differnet
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different
 ups and downs. The sales started
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 200
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millions
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million
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 Dirhams
at
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Janurary
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January
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 increased slightly to 230 million.
Afterwards
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 the rates rose sharply from
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February
 to March by around 130
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millions
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, which is the biggest rising trend in the whole year,
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 by
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 steady decline to around 110
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millions
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 July at the lowest point. After both the sharpest increase and most significant decreases, the rate went back up to 200 million to the starting point,
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dedclines
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declines
declined
 back to 110 million in September. It
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 made a small jump to 180
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millions
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 in October
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 and kept stable for the rest of the three months at around 170
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millions
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million
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 to below 200
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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