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The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.

The chart below gives information on the birth rate among women in England, from 1973 to 2020. The figures are measured in births per 1000 women.
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The line illustrates the
England
 statistical data of women being born from 1973 until 2020. The data have four categories
such
 as aged under 20, aged from 20 until 25, aged from 28 to 34 and aged more than 40. The rates of
birth
 used were calculated for every 1000 girls.
Overall
, the majority of the
birth
 rate in
England
 had decreased from 1973 until 2020, except for the category of women aged from 28 to 34
years
 old had increased from 1973 to 2020. Regarding of decrease in the
birth
 rate in
England
 from 1973 to 2020, the highest decrease of the women born aged 20
years
 to 25
years
.
In addition
, the
value
 of
birth
 in 1973 was approximately 120000
people
 and the
value
 decreased in 2020, reaching 20000
people
.
On the other hand
, the
value
 of aged below 20
years
 old and ranges from 20 to 25
years
 old had stagnant
value
. In terms of increasing numerical data aged from 28 to 34 in 1973 until 2020 in
England
.
In contrast
, based on graphics, we can see information that the highest increase in 1973 to 1980 and 2008 to 2020, where more than 20000
people
 increased; were 20000 to approximately 50000
people
 born and 60000
people
 reached 80000
people
birth
 rates in
England
, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words england, birth, years, value, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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