In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

#schools #universities #girls #art #e #g #literature #boys #science #subjects #physics #tendency

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

A large number of species are whipping out every year, and

this

Linking Words

has imperilled Earth's ecosystem in a way that has never been experienced before.

Although

Linking Words

the protection of animals may seem absurd, when many humans are in a delicate situation;

howerer

Correct your spelling

however

, If one delves into

this

Linking Words

issue, from a broad perspective, one will come to the understanding, that all species are connected in our ecosystem, similar to a chain, and extinction of some can endanger others. The wolves are hunted by lions,

whereas

Linking Words

they hunt sheep. If wolves become extinct, there would be no food for lions, and sheep would clear all the grass that exists, which can cause a dusty storm. So the protection of animals has a chain of benefits, not only in favour of humans but

also

Linking Words

other species.

Submitted by anayasinwriting on Fri Nov 17 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement

Your essay presents a viewpoint that identifies the interconnectedness of species within an ecosystem, which is relevant to the topic. However, the response slightly veers from the straightforward discussion of the direct impact on human life. To improve, ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the task.

coherence cohesion

While the essay's structure suggests an understanding of a basic introduction-body-conclusion format, the transitions between ideas could be more fluid. Utilize a range of conjunctions and discourse markers to improve the logical flow of ideas. Additionally, consider expanding the conclusion to encapsulate the essay's main points more effectively.

lexical resource

The vocabulary used is generally appropriate, with some good examples of topic-specific terminology. However, to score higher for lexical resource, aim to demonstrate a greater variety of vocabulary and attempt to use less common and more precise words.

grammatical range

The essay demonstrates a limited range of sentence structures. For a higher score, incorporate a variety of complex grammatical constructions, such as conditionals, passive voice, and relative clauses, making sure each sentence is clear and accurate.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

133 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

gender roles
career paths
traditional stereotypes
unconscious bias
role models
learning styles
analytical skills
inclusive environment
gender balance
diversifying perspectives
socio-cultural norms
self-fulfilling prophecy

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

4.5
band
In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this a positive or negative thing?
At present, suburb dwellers in some nations around the world, are relocating to towns looking for searching jobs and better lives, however, the rural society left with fewer people.Personally, I believe that others are benefiting from working and also enjoying their lives in urban areas.
5
band
In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advanages and disadvantages of gibing children this message?
There is no denying that with the rapid development of social norms, educational standards and approaches have become significantly diverse. As such, the signigicance of education on the sense of hard working have been increasingly recognized. While some people look upon asking children to make efforts contributes to their ultimate high-achievement, others advocate that children should not be placed excessive strain. Despite pushing children by strict inquiries driving a potential in better personal outcome, it cause negatives in the same time.
7.5
band
The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?
The most annoying thing that humans must face is the disease. However, it keeps appearing and transforming into another virus with new symptoms and people can not finish it with a simple cure. Therefore, there are ample healthy activities that help prevent sickness or slow down the progress of health issues. Moreover, public healthcare should prioritize using their fee to pay more attention to this problem.
7
band
In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?
In this contemporary epoch, some nations carry extremely strict regulations for providing excellent social skills to juveniles while the remaining allot a high level of freedom to them, to do whatever they want. This essay will delve into the importance of the level of freedom that should be rendered to children.
7
band
There have been several complaints about the reception area where visitors to your company arrive. Your manager has asked you to suggest how the reception area could be improved. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the complaints that have been made • say why the reception area is important • suggest how the reception area could be
I am writing this letter report the recent complaints regarding the express packages receiving issue at our reception desk. As more employees choose to deliver their goods purchased from online stores to our company's address, the part of the area is often occupied by those packages not claimed and fetched by their real consignees immediately.

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this a positive or negative thing?

In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advanages and disadvantages of gibing children this message?

The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should reflect this. To what extent do you agree?

In some countries children have very strict rules of behaviour, in other countries, they are allowed to do almost anything they want. To what extent should children have to follow rules?