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The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014

The charts below show the percentage of volunteers by organizations in 2008 and 2014
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The given pie charts portray information about the percentage of people who work unpaid in several sectors held by organisations in different years, 2008 and 2014.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the trends of
volunteers
 in environment, sport, and health care increased
whereas
 in art, education, and
others
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other sectors
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sector
 dropped. It is worth noticing that the proportion of
volunteers
 in
environmental
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the environmental
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sector
 was 21% in 2008, and
experiencing improve
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 around ten percent in 2014. In
sports
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the sports
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sector
, there
were
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 15% in 2008
,
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 and went up to
a quarters
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quarters
a quarter
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 in 2014.
In addition
, the number of people who worked  without pay in health care made up  7% in 2008, and these figures experienced a slight growth of one per cent in 2014. Meanwhile, it is apparently seen that
volunteers
 in
art
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the art
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sector
 fell a small percentage in 2014 compared to the
last
 period, from 18% in 2008 became 12% in 2014. In education, comparing almost a quarter of
volunteers
 in 2008, decreased to 17% in 2014.
Moreover
, the rates for
volunteers
 accounted for 15% in other sectors in 2008
,
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 and witnessed a significant rate under ten per cent
at the end
 of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words volunteers, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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