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The picture below shows the use of renewable energy accounting the total energy from 1971 to 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting main feature and make comparison where relevant.

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The line chart provides information about how the consumption of renewable energy changed in six countries between 1971 and 2011.
Overall
, there was an increase in the proportion of the use of various energy sources which can be renewed in all nations, except for Finland.
In addition
, the figures for Finland were consistently the highest ones
whereas
 those for the UK were invariably the lowest. In 1971, approximately 25% of the total power used in
the
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Finland
were
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 source, followed by a fluctuation in the range from 18% to 22% in the next three decades before reaching 23%
at the end
 of the period.
Conversely
, only 3% of energy consumed by US people could be renewable at the beginning of the stage, after which it experienced a sharp growth to around 18% in
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2011. Similar changes, but to
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 extent, can be seen in the figures for the UK and Germany, which rose from around 1% and 5% in 1971 to 6% and 13% in the next 40 years respectively. Despite some
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 fluxes, the percentage of the
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 of renewable power in
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Denmark and France
also
 climbed from 15% and 8% in 1971 to 17% and 13% in 2011 in that order.
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task achievement
Provide a clear introduction that sets the context of the data being analyzed and a clear conclusion that summarizes the main trends or findings.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay follows a logical structure, organizing it into clear paragraphs with each main point discussed in separate sections.
coherence cohesion
Support main points with specific data from the graph when making comparisons or reporting changes. Avoid reporting data that may not be accurate if exact figures are not given.

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