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The given bar chart illustrate the proportions of divorce in two European countries (Finland, Sweden) from 2011 to 2015. These values are measured in percentages.

The given bar chart illustrate the proportions of divorce in two European countries (Finland, Sweden) from 2011 to 2015. These values are measured in percentages.
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the bar chat gives us information about divorce rates in
finland
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 and
sweden
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Sweden
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between 2011 and 2015 .
overall
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 it can be seen that the level of divorces in
finland
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 for 4
year
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 was higher than
rate
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the rate
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 of broken up in
sweden
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Sweden
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,
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however
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this
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 amount was
decline
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declined
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 in 2015 . regards to the percentage of dicorces in
finland
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, in 2012
saw
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the
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 rate of divorces
was
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apply
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peaked at slightly below %50 which was the highest level of broken
up
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over the
perioed
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period
, after
next
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 3
year
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this
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 rate
was
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steadly decearse
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steadily decreased
to around %40 . refers to
sweden
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 where the number of people
who
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 they have ended their
relashinship
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relationship
in 2011 started by about %35 percentage ,
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totall
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total
totally
was
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gradually dropped to %32 which was the lower level of divorces , during the period
of
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between
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 2012 and 2015
this
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persentage
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percentage
jumped slowly.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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