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The given bar chart illustrate the proportions of divorce in two European countries (Finland, Sweden) from 2011 to 2015. These values are measured in percentages.

The given bar chart illustrate the proportions of divorce in two European countries (Finland, Sweden) from 2011 to 2015. These values are measured in percentages.
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the bar chat gives us information about divorce rates in
finland
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 and
sweden
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Sweden
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between 2011 and 2015 .
overall
 it can be seen that the level of divorces in
finland
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 for 4
year
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 was higher than
rate
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 of broken up in
sweden
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Sweden
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,
however
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this
 amount was
decline
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 in 2015 . regards to the percentage of dicorces in
finland
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, in 2012
saw
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the
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 rate of divorces
was
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peaked at slightly below %50 which was the highest level of broken
up
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over the
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period
, after
next
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 3
year
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this
 rate
was
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steadly decearse
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steadily decreased
to around %40 . refers to
sweden
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Sweden
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 where the number of people
who
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 they have ended their
relashinship
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relationship
in 2011 started by about %35 percentage ,
although
this
totall
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total
totally
was
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gradually dropped to %32 which was the lower level of divorces , during the period
of
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between
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 2012 and 2015
this
persentage
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percentage
jumped slowly.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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