The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrates fractions of businesses' e-commerce
purchase
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purchases

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based on industry in Canada from 2015 to 2019. In essence, the construction companies' e-commerce spending rose sharply over the years, followed by
wholesale's
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numbers which climbed up steadily. For
retails
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, the percentage shot up for a year before slightly
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manufacturing's
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manufacturing

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purchase
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purchases

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which went up and down drastically. The rates of online commercial payment
was
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high right from the start for information and communication business and
ascend
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and
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slightly after. The purchase rates for online promotion by manufacturers started from 30
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percent
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, and the numbers rose unsteadily, having 60
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percent
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per cent

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in the end. The construction business, in 2015 with the least
salesment
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salesmen
salesman

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of 20
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percent
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per cent

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, shot right up to 60
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percent
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at
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in

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2019. Meanwhile for wholesales, having
high
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a high

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percentages
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percentage

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of 60
percent
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, ascended slightly
70
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to 70

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percent
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. Online commercial use by retail
business
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businesses

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shot up from 30
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percent
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in 2015 to 50
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percent
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,
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but waned in later years. And for information and communication-related businesses, by 2015 it was already the highest out of all by 60
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percent
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per cent

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, the numbers
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fluctuate

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slightly, achieving
an
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around 70
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percent
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per cent

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rate of promotion via online ads.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shot" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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