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The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
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The line graph depicts the employment trends in the USA measured in millions and
also
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 displays
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future predictions.
Overall
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, it is readily apparent that employment in services will increase significantly
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 in the future. The agriculture industry will slowly decrease throughout the years.
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, the Manufacturing area will fluctuate over the years, from rising to falling in the future. On the one hand,
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employment in services is steady from 1975-1979 at 15
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 jobs recruitment but
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 it will dramatically surge up to 90
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 by the year 2025.
In contrast
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, the agricultural industry is highest at 80
million
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 from all 3 categories between the year 1975-1977 All though, it steadily decreases to 40
million
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 in 1989 and
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 drops to 18
million
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 in 1982.
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 it is predicted that it will fall
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 to 10
million
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 by the year 2025.
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, the manufacturing area rose slowly from 1975-1979 at 16
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 and
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 shot up to 40
million
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 in 1980. Still, from there it falls back down to 18
million
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 in 1982.
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, it is
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 predicted to fall even more in 2025.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, further".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trends" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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