The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.

The line chart shows trends in terms of employment in the USA in millions and predictions for the future.
The line graph depicts the employment trends in the USA measured in millions and
also
displays
the
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future predictions.
Overall
, it is readily apparent that employment in services will increase significantly
further
in the future. The agriculture industry will slowly decrease throughout the years.
However
, the Manufacturing area will fluctuate over the years, from rising to falling in the future. On the one hand,
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employment in services is steady from 1975-1979 at 15
million
jobs recruitment but
then
it will dramatically surge up to 90
million
by the year 2025.
In contrast
, the agricultural industry is highest at 80
million
from all 3 categories between the year 1975-1977 All though, it steadily decreases to 40
million
in 1989 and
further
drops to 18
million
in 1982.
As well as
it is predicted that it will fall
further
to 10
million
by the year 2025.
On the other hand
, the manufacturing area rose slowly from 1975-1979 at 16
million
and
then
shot up to 40
million
in 1980. Still, from there it falls back down to 18
million
in 1982.
In addition
, it is
also
predicted to fall even more in 2025.
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