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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various catego ries during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each c ategory of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an d make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various catego ries during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each c ategory of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an d make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts provide data on the amount of exporting incomes in a variety of areas in a specific nation in both 2015 and 2016.
Overall
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, in 2016 the level of income from exporting in petroleum, engineering, and textile
were
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 higher compared to 2015.
In addition
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, the loads of
money
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 from selling agricultural products in both years
was
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were
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 equal,
while
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 the profit
of
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from
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 germs and
jewelries
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jewelry
pieces of jewelry
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 in 2016 was lower than
2015
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in 2015
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 despite other categories.
According to
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 the chart, the
money
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comes
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that comes
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 from exporting petroleum goods and engineered products experienced an increasing trend from 2015 to 2016 and reached from 61
billion
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dollars
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 to 63
billion
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dollars
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 and from 57
billion
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dollars
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 to the same level as petroleum income in 2016 respectively.
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, the earned
money
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 in
textile
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textiles
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 rose from below 30
billion
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dollars
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 to more than that. It is obvious that despite all
growing
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the growing
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 trends, the profits from sending gold and
jewelries
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jewelry
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 declined from 43
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 to about 2
billion
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dollars
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 lower. The
money
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 derived from selling agricultural products almost remained unchanged in both years and was about
31billion
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31 billion
dollars
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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