The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various catego ries during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each c ategory of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, an d make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar charts provide data on the amount of exporting incomes in a variety of areas in a specific nation in both 2015 and 2016.

Overall

, in 2016 the level of income from exporting in petroleum, engineering, and textile

were

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was

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higher compared to 2015.

In addition

, the loads of

money

from selling agricultural products in both years

was

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were

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equal,

while

the profit

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from

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germs and

jewelries

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jewelry

pieces of jewelry

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in 2016 was lower than

2015

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in 2015

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despite other categories.

According to

the chart, the

money

comes

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that comes

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from exporting petroleum goods and engineered products experienced an increasing trend from 2015 to 2016 and reached from 61

billion

dollars

to 63

billion

dollars

and from 57

billion

dollars

to the same level as petroleum income in 2016 respectively.

Also

, the earned

money

textile

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textiles

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rose from below 30

billion

dollars

to more than that. It is obvious that despite all

growing

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the growing

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trends, the profits from sending gold and

jewelries

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jewelry

pieces of jewelry

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declined from 43

billion

dollars

in 2015 to about 2

billion

dollars

lower. The

money

derived from selling agricultural products almost remained unchanged in both years and was about

31billion

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31 billion

dollars

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