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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years.
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The pie charts compare various
of
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energy resources of
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France
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france
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France
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 from 1995 to 2005
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 in relevant
years
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 ,gas and coal is the main part of
france
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France
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 energy manufacture . Nuclear , petrol and other kinds of resources consist of half of production france energy
manugacture
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manufacture
manufacturer
. Coal production both
in
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year
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 slightly climbed.
especially
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goal
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obtaining
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 30.93% in 2005. Gas
imdustry
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industry
 followed by
30.31%and
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30.31 %and
 increased
0.68
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 % (1995 -2005
years
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)during 5
years
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.
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however
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 petrol
source
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sources
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decrased
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decreased
10
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by 10
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relevant
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in relevant
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years
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( 1995-2005),
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on inother
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inother
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other
 hand nuclear production and other resources raised
approxilately
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approximately
 5.6 % in 5
years
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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