The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The pie charts
depicts
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the percentages of British pupils of an
England University
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English university
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that
available
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to produce other foreign languages
beside
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English in 2 different years; 2000 and 2010. By and large, some pupils dominated to speak in French, German, or Spanish only,
another
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other
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students
were able to make conversation in one or two other
language
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, and the rest could not talk in other languages unless in English.
To begin
with, in 2000, the
number
of
students
who can speak French was 15% but in the next 1o years, its
number
decreased by 5%. The same trend happened to those who could not
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other language than English, which within 10
years
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10-year
span of period, the
number
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fell
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by 10%.
However
, the opposite trend happened to the category of
students
who speak in Spanish, only one other language, and two other languages. It can be seen that the
number
of
students
in these categories had increased from 2000 to 2010 by 5%.
While
other categories made
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gradually
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changes, it seemed that only
students
who could speak German experienced no changes by getting stable in its
number
, 10%.
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