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The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: - A brief introduction of yourself - Your experience and relevant skills - Why you want the job

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Dear Sir/ Madam,                             I am writing
this
 letter for the application of the job during the Summer Time.
Firstly
 ,I would like to introduce
to
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myself. I am Rahul Kumar  studying M.Sc. in Computer Science from the Department of Science.I have good experience working in
library
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a library
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 as a bookshelf filler.
while
 pursuing
of
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my Bachelor's degree, I
was working
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 in the
library
 as
the
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library
 assistant. I  hold 2 years of experience as
the
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a
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library
 assistant.  My daily job duties include sorting
books
, rearrangement of
shelfs
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shelves
shelf
, shelving
books
/magazines which are left out on the study table, adding new
books
 to the database,
providing
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 assistance for students in finding
books
. My
library
 head was very much impressed with my
work
. Looking at my zeal and commitment towards
work
, I was offered to
work
 extra hours between 5pm to 7 pm in to evening.I am looking forward to
work
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 as a
library
 assistant, As I am very much interested in living between
book
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books
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 and love serving people.
Moreover
, it will help me financially as well to pay my fees.Hope to see your reply soon.Yours SincerelyRahul Kumar
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coherence cohesion
Pay attention to the structure of the letter, ensuring that each paragraph contains a single idea and logically transitions to the next. Consider including a salutation that accurately addresses the person or committee responsible for hiring.
task achievement
Develop each point fully to meet the reader's expectations, cover all aspects of the task, and provide more details that support your application effectively. Remember to use a polite and professional tone throughout the letter.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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