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You should spend about 20 minutes to write this task. The picture below shows the recycling process of wasted glass bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

#minutes #picture #process #glass #bottles #summarise #information #features #comparison
The diagram shows a method of used
glass
bottles'
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bottles
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 recycling‚ consisting of 3 stages.
Overall
, the wasted
glass
bottles
 are collected at the
collect
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 point which are transferred to the factory for recycling
then
are
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apply
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sent to the supermarket for sale.
Firstly
, the wasted
glass
bottles
 are gathered and
are
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kept at the warehouse,
then
 the truck will transport them to the factory. Before starting
recycling
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the recycling
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 procedure, the wasted
glass
bottles
 are cleaned
by
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with
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 high-pressure water to remove the impurities and dirty
stain
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stains
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 that come with them and
then
 are classified by
colors
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colours
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 into 3 groups (brown, green, transparent). After finishing classification, they will move to the
glass
 factory and start the recycling process by breaking the
glass
bottles
 into pieces. In the next step, the
glass
 pieces are burned in
furnace
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with
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at
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the temperature
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temperature
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temperatures
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at
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of
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 600
celsius
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Celsius
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 up to 800
celsius
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. They
are melting
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melt
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 and become
to
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liquid
glass
then
 are shaped
in
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into
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glass
block
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blocks
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.
Lastly
‚ after the bottle
have
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 already dried. They are sent to sell at the supermarket or food mart to complete the process.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure the introduction and conclusion are clearly distinguished and effectively summarize the main points of the process.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by using a wider range of linking words and phrases to help guide the reader through the stages of the process.
coherence cohesion
While the main points are supported, try to include more specific details and examples to fully represent the information provided by the diagram.
task achievement
The prompt has been addressed, and the main features of the recycling process are described. Nevertheless, strive to provide a more complete response by examining all aspects of the diagram in detail.
task achievement
Your description of the process is clear, but you can enhance comprehension by organizing the ideas more logically and establishing clearer connections between the stages.
task achievement
Incorporate specific data or examples from the diagram when describing the recycling process to create a more comprehensive and precise report.

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