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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table
compare
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 the percentage of female in
white
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 collar in three different corporate
Eldan
ltd
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Ltd
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,
Bamforth
ltd
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Ltd
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 and
Finsbury
ltd
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Ltd
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 over a
period
 of 4 decades.
Overall
, it can be seen
Eldan
company
 significantly increased,
while
female
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females
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 were
lowest
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 cooperation in
Finsbury
ltd
 during
this
period
.
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 1975 to 1985, in
this
 decade
Eldan
 recorded the lowest, the number of
this
company
 receive women join the senior management only occupied 3%,
while
 least than other
company
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companies
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, and
remain
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 stable
this
 figure still 1980. After
that
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 it rapidly increased to 14% in 1980.
Bamforth
 had slowly changed, which was 9% to 11,
increased
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and increased
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 by
on
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2% from 1975
to1980
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to 1980
.
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Finsbury
ltd
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Ltd
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was
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had
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 the highest proration of
the
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women
cooperated
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who cooperated
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 in the
work place
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workplace
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 from 1975 to 1980,
which reached
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reaching
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 16%, it was quintuple and twice respectively than
the
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Eldan
ltd
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Ltd
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 and
the
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Bamforth
ltd
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Ltd
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 in the first time
period
, and
continue
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continued
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 slowly rising to 17 in 2000. In 1985, Eland and
Finsbury
 figures were close to the other one
company
, which had 14% and 13% respectively female join the job.
In after
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 30 years, Eland
company
 became the most
popularly
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 for
the
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women
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women's
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 choice.
This
 figure rapidly increased by
three
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 fifth compared（61%）
with
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to
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 1975, which reached 64%. The
Bamforth
 corporation increased fast to 46%, which increased by nearly less than a third (29%)
in
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at
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 the end of
year
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the year
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.
Finsbury
 became more lowest choice
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of
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than
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of
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 other
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companies
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company
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companies
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 during
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these
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this
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these
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 4 decades, it
was fluctuates
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fluctuated
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 and
get
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reached
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apply
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the
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apply
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26
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in
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at
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the end
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end
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the end
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 of
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the period
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period
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the period
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 in the graph
shows
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apply
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words eldan, ltd, bamforth, finsbury, period, company with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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