The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.

The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in 1995 and 2005.
The provided pie chart illustrates the visual representation of
energy
types produced in France in two years, 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, Coal is the most produced one in both two years,
in contrast
, other kinds of
energy
which are not mentioned by their names take the least piece from the pie. For talking about a decrease, as seen from the chart, only one type of
energy
witnessed a fall.
This
is Petrol which became 19.55% in 2005,
while
it was one of the backbones in 1995 with 29.27%. Coming to growth, the slices of Gas and Coal witnessed a very slight increase by 1% merely, and
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30.31% and 30.92% respectively in 2005. Contrarily, the production of Nuclear and other kinds of
energy
have
significant rise
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percentage-wise:
portion
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a portion
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of Nuclear
energy
rose from 6.4% to approximately one-tenth of the pie, and other types of
energy
almost doubled(4.9% in 1995, and 9.1% in 2005).
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