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The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.

The graph below shows the average daily spend of three categories of international visitor to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017. Summarise it.
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The line graph shows the average daily
spend
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 of three categories by international
visitor
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visitors
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 to New Zealand from 1997 to 2017.
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,
international
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an international
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visitor
 spends their time
for
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on
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 business activity, and visiting friends
as
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is
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 the
least
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last
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 category. In the business category, average daily spending by
visitor
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visitors
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 went up to USD 320 in 2000 and
then
 fell drastically to USD 180 in 2004 and fluctuated until 2017.
Visitor
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A visitor
The visitor
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 who spends their time
for
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apply
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visiting friends reached
its
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their
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 peak
to
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 USD 220 in 2002. And decreased and fluctuated.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitor with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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