The table below gives information on UK males’ and females’ average hours and minutes on different daily activities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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on United Kingdom both Correct your spelling
comparison
mens'
and Change noun form
men's
womens'
average time Change noun form
women's
spending
on different daily activities.
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spent
Overall
, from the initial perspective, we can find that the most time spending
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spent
for
both Change preposition
by
gender
is sleeping which is over 8 hours a day, and the Change to a plural noun
genders
least
one for males and females Correct your spelling
last
is
sport and others which is 0.13 and 0.07 respectively per day. Correct your spelling
in
Moreover
, we can see that males have more leisure in their life
than women.
Fix the agreement mistake
lives
Firstly
, men spend their day in some categories a negligible more than women, for instance
in eating and drinking, watching TV/DVD and listen
to radio/music, hobbies and games, sports and travel. Wrong verb form
listening
Subsequently
, women spend a mere over than men on resting, personal care, childcare, social life and entertainment/culture, reading and voluntary work and meetings.
Moreover
, in the end, although
UK females' hours on
housework are Change preposition
of
considarably
more than Correct your spelling
considerably
mens'
, Change noun form
men's
mens'
hours in employment and study Change noun form
men's
is
markedly higher.Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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