The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Dear John, Thank you so much for agreeing to take care of our beloved cat Fluffy

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we are away for the holiday. Our flight is on the 22nd of December, and we are going to be back on the 4th of January. I’m going to prepare his portable carrier, toilet and packages of feed by our front door for your convenience. Fluffy loves good company and

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playful.

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free to pet him as much as you want, he almost never scratches or bites anyone on purpose. His diet includes two meals a day with wet feed at 9 am and 6 pm.

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, leave the bowl with water and another with dry feed for him. I usually clean his toilet every other day.

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, if you can ask you to water the plants on the window twice a week and bring home the parcels from the post deliveries once they are at the house porch. Thank you again for the help that you so generously offered! On the weekend after our arrival, we are inviting you for

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dinner at our place! Yours, Vitaly

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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7 paragraphs

188 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

elderly, senior
emerging technologies
wisdom, maturity, seasoned
agility, nimble
entrepreneurial spirit
innovativeness
adaptability
mentorship, guidance
succession planning
diversity, inclusiveness
risk-taking, calculated risks
demographics
intergenerational
knowledge transfer
organizational renewal
challenges, drawbacks

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The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realised you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: thank your friend for the holiday explain that you left your wallet in their house give them instructions of how to send it back to you

These days, a lot of people have their own computer and telephone, it has become quit easy do job from home. Do you think it has more advantages and disadvantages of work from home?

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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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