The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Dear John, Thank you so much for agreeing to take care of our beloved cat Fluffy

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we are away for the holiday. Our flight is on the 22nd of December, and we are going to be back on the 4th of January. I’m going to prepare his portable carrier, toilet and packages of feed by our front door for your convenience. Fluffy loves good company and

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playful.

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free to pet him as much as you want, he almost never scratches or bites anyone on purpose. His diet includes two meals a day with wet feed at 9 am and 6 pm.

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, leave the bowl with water and another with dry feed for him. I usually clean his toilet every other day.

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, if you can ask you to water the plants on the window twice a week and bring home the parcels from the post deliveries once they are at the house porch. Thank you again for the help that you so generously offered! On the weekend after our arrival, we are inviting you for

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dinner at our place! Yours, Vitaly

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

elderly, senior
emerging technologies
wisdom, maturity, seasoned
agility, nimble
entrepreneurial spirit
innovativeness
adaptability
mentorship, guidance
succession planning
diversity, inclusiveness
risk-taking, calculated risks
demographics
intergenerational
knowledge transfer
organizational renewal
challenges, drawbacks

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The leaders or directors of organizations are often elderly people. However some say that young people can also take the lead of organisations or companies. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

People buy a product if it fulfills their needs, there is no need for advertisement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

the alteration of the happy valley shopping center between 1982 and 2012.

Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion

Childood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsilbility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statement?