The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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pie chart highlights the percentage of

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males

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and

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females

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in various

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groups in Austria who

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involved in physical exercise in 2010 .

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following graphs there are no special trends observed. All categories are below 55%.

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just over 50%

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females are responsible

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%.

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to 34

age

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men and women

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under 50 %.

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in the

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35 to 44 female participants are less interested in attending physical

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which is only 50%

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accounted for as usual

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other groups

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group

.

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from 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 years old people indicate the same ratio of physical exercise.

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Australian senior citizens

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who are above 65 or more have almost equal

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of exercise for both males and females which are

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46.7% and 47.1%. In

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it’s clear that half of

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population is interested in exercising at any

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. And there is no big difference albeit

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are considered

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be a

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bit more active than men.