The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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given
pie chart highlights the percentage of Verb problem
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male
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males
female
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females
age
groups in Austria who consistently
involved in physical exercise in 2010 .Add a missing verb
were consistently
The
following graphs there are no special trends observed. All categories are below 55%.
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whereas
females are responsible 47.7
%. Change preposition
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groups
are remain
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in the Add a comma
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age
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35 to 44 female participants are less interested in attending physical activistes
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activities
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males are
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others
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other groups
group
.
However
from 45 to 54 and 55 to 64 years old people indicate the same ratio of physical exercise. On the contrary
Australian senior citizens those
who are above 65 or more have almost equal Correct pronoun usage
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number
of exercise for both males and females which are Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
respectively
46.7% and 47.1%.
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conclusion
it’s clear that half of Add a comma
conclusion,
Australian
population is interested in exercising at any Add an article
the Australian
age
group
. And there is no big difference albeit women's
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women
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bit more active than men.Correct your spelling
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