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The line graph below shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the percentage of people who used five different communication methods between 1998 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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illustrateshowmouch
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illustrates how much

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percentage of people used five different types of communication approaches from 1998 to 2008.
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, it can be observed that the proportion of cellular phone service outnumbered that of landline
serivce
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service

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and became the most
popularmethods
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popular method

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to communicate in the area in 2002.
Percentage
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The percentage

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 of cellular phone service took up the maximal proportion over the years, after three consecutively dramatic increases from its lowest point
approximately
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of approximately

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 15% to the peak
60
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of 60

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% in 2008. Interestingly, the initial highest percentage of all only
flactuated
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fluctuated
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between 15% and 20% and remained the same ratio as that in 1998. In
therms
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terms

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 of the
initernet
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internet

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service, the counterpart kept a stable trend before 2002 and, after that, was seen a significant change from about 5% to almost 19% and
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 rose slowly to 20%. In the meanwhile, the proportion of fixed broadband almost stayed the same despite a slight
flactuation
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fluctuation

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after 2002. As for the least frequent
using
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use

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 of mobile broadband, the
munber
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number

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has just gradually grown
for
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by

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 only a little bit from
onriginal
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original

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0% to 4%.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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