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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should * GDP (Gross Domestic Product) is the total value of goods that are made and services that are provided in a country.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of GDP
that is
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 spent on
healthcare
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 in a number of different European
countries
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 over a ten-year period. It is salient to note that there is great variation between the
nation states
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 in terms of expenditure with high and low levels of spending,
as well as
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 increases and decreases over time. Certain
countries
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 can be described as high-spending compared to their peers. Specifically, Switzerland and Belgium spent the largest proportion over the period with 11 per
cent
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 and 10 per
cent
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 respectively.
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 is compared to Lithuania and Estonia
who
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which
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 spent the least (4-5 per
cent
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 and 3 per
cent
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).
This
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 means Switzerland
almost
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apply
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spent 75 per
cent
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 more than Estonia as a percentage of their respective GDPs. Over the period there was some variation in the percentage of
healthcare
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 investment, with increases or decreases of between 1-2 per
cent
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.
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, Denmark , Poland, Lithuania, Slovenia and Norway all saw increases in spending.
However
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, France, Netherlands and Luxemburg experienced a fall. The Netherlands was the only country where spending deviated significantly, dropping from 10 to 8 per
cent
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.
By contrast
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, certain
countries
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 saw no change in the money they allocated to
healthcare
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 over the years in question. Spain (8 per
cent
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) and Estonia (3 per
cent
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)
and
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apply
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fall into
this
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 category.
Overall
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, the amount of money spent on
healthcare
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 differs dramatically between the different
countries
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.
Furthermore
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, it appears that
health care
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healthcare
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 spending fluctuates year upon year in many of the
countries
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 surveyed.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words healthcare, countries, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • Percentage increase/decrease
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Fluctuation
  • Economic factors
  • Healthcare priorities
  • Public spending
  • Comparative analysis
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