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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration demonstrates the stages in the collection of
rain
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rainwater
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water
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 to be used as drinking
water
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 in a town in Australia.
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, it is a 5 stage, man-made, linear process. It begins with the capture of
water
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 when it rains and
finally
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resluts
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results
 in clean drinking
water
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 being used in people's homes. First of all, when it rains,
water
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 is captured on the roof of people's houses. The
water
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 runs down the roof and into the gutters, where it
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 flows into drain pipes attached to the side of the house. After that, all drain pipes of the house flow into one larger system, from where the
water
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 is
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 run through a
water
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 filter. Once the
water
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 is
filterd
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filtered
, it
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 flows into larger storage tanks where it is held until a later time. Following that, the
water
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 is
transfered
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transferred
 to a
water
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 treatment tank where chemicals are added
into
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to
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 it. From
this
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, the
water
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 is ready to be
deliveried
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delivered
 via pipes that flow from the treatment tank to people's homes.

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