The pie charts compare five various types of resources for energy production of France in 1995 and 2005.

The pie charts compare five various types of resources for energy production of France in 1995 and 2005.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts compare five various types of resources for energy production of France in 1995 and 2005.
The pie charts compare five various types of
resources
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for
energy
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production
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of
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in
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France
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in 1995 and 2005, and units are measured
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in percentage
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percentage
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percentages
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(%). İn
overall
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, in both years, gas and coal were the significant
resources
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for
energy
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production
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in
France
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such
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as
accounted
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accounting
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for over half of
total
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the total
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production
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of
energy
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.
Following
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this
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, nuclear and other kind of
energy
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resources
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generated the least amount of
energy
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in
France
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.
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Energy
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The energy
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produced by coal
represent
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represents
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the highest portion
such
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as 29.8 in the first year and showed
very
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a very
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slightly
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slight
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increase, approximately, 1 % in 2005.
Other
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side, gas generated 29.63% which rose marginally to 30.1% ten years later. Turning to other types of
energy
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resources
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, petrol experienced 29.27%
while
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this
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figure showed
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a rapidly
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rapidly
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rapid
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decrease
about
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of about
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10%. There was an approximate 5% increase
for
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in
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both nuclear and other
energy
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production
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resources
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in
France
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for
2005
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the 2005
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year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words resources, energy, production, france with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compare" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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