The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house. The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar
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charts
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illustrate the information about the number of
males
and
females
who do four different housework activities and
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time that they do in each task. The
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first
figures are given in percentages and the second are minutes.
Overall
it can be seen from the
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charts
that
females
do many types of housework more than
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males
and the
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amount
of time spent usually led the male except house repairs. The highest percentage kinds of female home tasks is cooking with 80%
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the
females
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more than the
males
20%. followed by cleaning and pet care, with the
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being 60% and 20% respectively.
However
there is one activity that the
males
do more than the
females
is repairs
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is repairing
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with 20% and 10% greater than the
females
. For time
spending
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, the highest amount is cooking for the
females
with 85%
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more than the
males
15
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with 15
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%.
In contrast
, repairing is housework that the
males
do more than
therefore
the average
times
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time
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is more than the
females
with roughly 15%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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